"Why University of Wisconsin"

University of Wisconsin-Madison

Tell us why you decided to apply to the University of Wisconsin-Madison. In addition, please include why you are interested in studying the major(s) you have selected. If you selected undecided please describe your areas of possible academic interest.

80 - 650 words

(University of Wisconsin-Madison)

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The only thing I associated with both Wisconsin the state and Wisconsin the university was cheese. For some irrational reason, I believed our campus tour would include shrines to cheese, statues of cheese, and endless cheese boutiques (is there such a thing?). In that respect, I was sorely disappointed. In every other respect, I was anything but. My mental checklist for colleges, after much condensing, contained three bullet points. Firstly, and most importantly, I wanted to go somewhere academically rigorous and research intensive, with innovative, dedicated professors and students as dedicated as I was. Secondly, I wanted a beautiful campus, to love where I would live for four years. And thirdly, I wanted to be happy.

After seeing the towering monuments to research, the countless labs and classrooms and libraries, I knew, beyond a shadow of a doubt, that the University of Wisconsin was dedicated to providing its students with the best education possible, be it in the classroom or the lab. I knew my love for the molecular basis of life would be cultivated here like so many cell cultures.

I remember boiling down cabbage with my dad to make acid/base indicators, talking in the car about the differences between branched and unbranched hydrocarbons in gasoline. In elementary school, my teacher wrote in my recommendation that I had been spending too much time reading animal books and too little time playing with other kids. I loved (and still love) all things living, often marvelling at the complexity of the animal kingdom, the human body, the organs, and the cells that were the foundation for everything else. The first time I read about the process of translation, of rendering mRNA into proteins, my eyes filled with tears; this is what I wanted to do, to apply the chemistry that had defined my childhood to my love of biology.

The University of Wisconsin shares that passion, dedicating a plethora of resources, both intellectual and material, to its Biochemistry department. With technologies like biolayer interferometry, classes in the molecular control of metabolic disease, and distinguished professors, the University of Wisconsin Madison has everything any biochemistry undergraduate student would need, and much more. To research under a PI like Dr. Venturelli, listed among 33 other researchers as “the Future of Biochemistry” would be an unequalled opportunity, a dream fulfilled. Her work in drawing links between microbiome health and malnutrition in third-world countries does what the University of Wisconsin does best; making academic discoveries both relevant and essential in the real world. It is a culture I would be honored to take part in, should I be accepted.

Although the University of Wisconsin Madison undoubtedly satisfied the first item on my mental list, I was sure my last two criteria would not go unmet. Located along the shore of Lake Manitoba and in walking distance of Madison, rated one of the best small cities in America by National Geographic, the University of Wisconsin Madison provides the ideal setting to learn, be challenged, and simply have fun. Walking by the lakefront with music playing in the background, I was sure that four years at the University of Wisconsin Madison would be challenging, but fun nonetheless. Our two tour guides embodied the Wisconsin spirit, recounting feeling the ground shake during “Jump around” and being pelted with snowballs after rushing Bascom Hill. Walking off of campus with my dad, salted caramel ice cream in hand (courtesy of “A Daily Scoop”), I felt a visceral sense of belonging, of knowing that this is where I wanted to learn and develop as a citizen of the world.

Why This Essay Works:

  • Shows They Know The School Well: This essay uses a lot of a great, specific references about UW Madison that show that the author has done their research and know the school well. Your reasons for applying in these "Why Us?" essays should be as specific as possible. This essay uses references to specific professors and their work, lab equipment ("biolayer interferometry"), courses, and features about campus. All of this works to create a compelling reason why this student would be a good fit, while also demonstrating strong interest in the school. When writing "Why Us" essays, doing your research to find unique and specific aspects is most important.
  • Connects To Area Of Study: Even for "Why Us?" essays that don't explicitly ask you to write about your major, referencing your intended major is often a strong reason "why." By connecting what you want to study with what the school offers, you can show how your studies would be made even better. Admissions officers are trying to imagine how you'd fit into campus, so try showing them how you'd be engaged in the specific department. Researching the department is also a good idea, as often times it is easier to find unique qualities about a department (like "Biochemistry department") than it is to find about the school as a whole.
  • Shows Personality And Humor: This essay starts off with a somewhat unserious introduction, referencing Wisconsin's reputation for cheese-making. Although this is casual and humorous, it serves as an engaging introduction into their main ideas about what the school offers. Using humor can show your personality, while also making it more fun for admissions officers to read. They'll be more likely to find your essay likable if you can include small moments of lightheartedness. This student also shows their personality through interjecting their thoughts (like this is doing here) using parentheses, which works to bring the reader into your thought process.

What They Might Change:

  • Avoid Prefacing Your Ideas: In this intro, the author sets up three points that they use as criteria for what they want in a school. However, this ultimately ends up creating unnecessary repetition because they later they discuss each of those points in detail. In general, avoid prefacing your ideas or thoughts. That is, you don't have to "prepare" or "introduce" what you're about to say to the reader. Instead, it is usually more compelling to just start with those juicy details rather than setting them up.
Word Count: 598/650
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Why this rating?
The essay is well-written and demonstrates a strong display of ideas and genuine personality. The writing style is engaging and effective. It is likely to be very well-received by the admissions committee.
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